Wednesday, August 19, 2009

WIP Wednesday

I have started a new story for Horsemen of the Apocalypse antho from Pill house press and I have to say I am really enjoying it. I am only about 1K into it so far. I will post a segment of it below. It is a combination of Famine and War (they seem to go together quite nicely in my story, one bringing about the other.)

In other news, I am still editing Chief's Gold. I had a nice discussion with my wife about character names yesterday and she gave me some good ideas (I didn't like the generic names I had given 50% of my characters) For some reason, when I wrote it I switched back and forth between 3rd person and 1st person. I didn't intend to. I guess that is what edits are for. To catch crap like that.

I kind of doubt if I get any writing done today, other than this blog post. My boy is sick with a virus of some sort (it is in the throat and head. I know this because I have the same thing.) and I am dead tired from being up most of the night with him. We did manage to go on a nice drive until 2 in the morning.

Now for a glimpse of unfinished story:
I turned from him, aware of what would happen next. Behind me I could hear him start to convulse, gurgle and paw at the ground with his boots that he had stuffed with the cover of a burned book to replace the worn out sole. I tried not to think of the misery he was going through and if I would go the same way as the sounds shuffled to a stop.
I could hear his corpse leak into the soil. That slow sucking sound of moisture in a parched land that no man should hear. Ashes to ashes as they say.

14 comments:

Jeremy Kelly said...

Vivid clip.

I haven't been able to crack Pill House Press yet. Maybe third time's the charm.

Hope your boy feels better.

Jamie Eyberg said...

Jeremy- I haven't cracked that market either. thanks for the well wishes.

Jameson T. Caine said...

Wow. With just a few simple words I am imagining all sorts of icky things. Good job. Good luck with the story and I hope everyone there feels better soon.

Catherine J Gardner said...

Hugs for your boy.

I love second drafts - they get rid of all the crap, but they don't have to be perfect just yet. Enjoy.

Aaron Polson said...

I can really see the boots...nice image.

Hope everyone's health clears up soon.

Natalie L. Sin said...

The ground sucking was wonderfully grotesque : )

Jamie Eyberg said...

Jameson- For me, simple is good.

Cate- It is hard to be mad at the little guy when I know how he feels. It sucks.

Aaron- I liked his boots too.

Nat- Glad you liked it.

K.C. Shaw said...

Pill House has scrumptious anthology themes. I really need to write something for them too.

I hope you and your boy feel better soon!

Danielle Ferries said...

Unfinished story sounds great - good imagery.

BT said...

Hope you all feel better soon.

'I could hear his corpse leak into the soil.'

That is just priceless. The imagery that will bring up will be different for each reader and yet equally grotesque - completely conveying what you want. Brilliant.

I look forward to the finished piece.

Jamie Eyberg said...

K.C.- You should.

Danielle- Thank you.

BT- I am looking forward to seeing where it goes as well. Some stories are better left to their own whims and devises. This is one of those stories.

katey said...

I agree with Aaron-- the boots are an awesome touch. My first drafts always harbor all kinds of weird mistakes that shock and appall. Second drafts are where it's at.

Jamie Eyberg said...

Katey- I start to hit my stride about draft 4.

Carrie Harris said...

Oooh. Love the Four Horsement bit.