Thursday, January 14, 2010

Thursday the Fourteenth

It doesn't have the ring or sense of awe that Friday the 13th has, but it is an honest assessment of the day. Work continues to drag slowly for the two projects I am working on. A page edited here, a paragraph written there. It is slowly adding up.

Very slowly.

Since I have posted the previous beginning of the story in an earlier post (this is the one about the prism that doesn't seem to work) I have reworked it- a lot. That is now the second section of a longer piece that delves into girl and the grandmother. This is the new beginning, although that could change at any moment.

I visited her every Summer and this summer had been no different. As soon as school let out my parents dove me the 400 miles from Minnesota to Missouri and then drove back without me.
It was three weeks without me and I think they secretly enjoyed it, even if they said they couldn't wait to see me. For me it was time with an old woman I had little in common with in a strange town I knew practically nothing about.

There is little speculative about it from this but it gets there. I promise. Sorry I had to post this on a day other than Wednesday. Have a great Thursday the fourteenth.


Aaron Polson said...

"time with an old woman I had little in common with in a strange town I knew practically nothing about"

Nothing fun about that. Sets up a nice swirl of tension from the get-go.

Jamie Eyberg said...

Aaron, and the worst part is the town itself and its problems (yet undiscovered) with the girl's grandma.

I really don't know why this one is proceeding as slowly as it has been. I think part of it is that I like my characters so much I don't want to screw it up so I am choosing each word more carefully than I normally would.

K.C. Shaw said...

I really like that opening. It could go anywhere--from chilling horror to touching literary fiction and anywhere in between. Or both! Good luck on it.

Fox Lee said...

I know a great Italian restaurant your character can go to! ; )

Jamie Eyberg said...

K.C., being the second opening for this story (and it might not be the last) I really like it as well. Of course, I still like my original beginning as well. :)

Nat, actually she has found that she likes to hang out in a hole-in-the-wall bar during the day and drink root beer and cheese balls. Very sophisticated for a ten year old.

Danielle Birch said...

Strange town got me in. I want to know more.

Unknown said...

just to be a PITA I like the fist beginning better.

Katey said...

I don't think it needs to be speculative right off to grab the attention-- and this proves it!